1.30.2015

summertime

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I watched as she wrote
her words written on her frail bones
from her mountain heart

Her laughter was like a soft rainfall
but her tears burned everything they touched
she was mesmerizing 

Oh, but then I saw her face
her face shone like the sky as the sun was falling
I couldn't quite take in another breath --
I was too afraid she'd disappear

like all beautiful things do. 

22 comments:

  1. Why do beautiful things have to disappear? :'( WHYYY???

    xoxo Morning

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  2. oh i almost gasped at the end because the words are so pretty

    gah you are amazing xxx.

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  3. Oh gosh this is so beautiful and beyond perfection <3

    With Love, Elizabeth
    http://whimsicalthoughtss.blogspot.com/

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    1. Adgjliikgj. God is ever so lovely, isn't He?

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  4. "her face shone like the sky as the sun was falling" I love that line... there's just something just so beautiful about it!

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    1. I've been watching sunsets a lot recently so yes yes yes. <3

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  5. Oh how lovely. I love how you said, "her tears burned everything they touched".
    Your writing is always so simple yet so lovely at the same time, and you have been given such an amazing talent! :)

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    1. Aw, thank you! Oh man. That just hits me deep down. Because writing is like....woah. And just...agh. Thank you.

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  6. I interpreted this poem as describing the fear of letting go. Just describing the loved one with aspects of nature like mountains and rainfall meant that the person you described was really as genuine and as pure as nature itself. Those are the attributes of the person that the writer had valued most, and I think the final line about comparing her to the sky/sun, was really interesting. The writer knows that the sky will always exist as to how nature is always present, but the idea of the sun setting scares the writer the most, because it would mean that she would be out of the writer's sight. The writer fears losing her though he knows that she's there and always will be. Beautiful poem. Wonderful read. :)

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    1. This comment made my day. Hahaha, thank you so so much Dian!

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  7. lovely.

    I'm always enthralled by your writing.

    and there may be times that I visit your blog just to look at the amazing pictures you have on your sidebar ;) jk but I do enjoy them.

    xx Lorraine from Laurel Crowned

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    1. Oh, you make me laugh Lorraine. Thank you soooo much! It means a lot to know you enjoy my writing. :-)

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  8. Perfectly beautiful.

    I nominated you for the You Are Amazing and So Is Your Blog Award you can view my post here:
    http://bethanysbrightlife.blogspot.com -Bethany!

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    1. Aw, you are too kind, Bethany! Thank you. :-D

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  9. I'm in awe of your writing skills, Candence. I'm seriously in speechless awe right now. I drank in every lovely word from that poem/story. You have such a beautiful talent, and I thank you for sharing it with us. <3

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    1. Asdfghjkl. Oh man, thank you to the moon and back, Eve! Thank you for letting me share it. :-)

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  10. You write so beautifully. No matter what happens in your life. please. do. not. stop.

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    1. Thankyouthankyouthankyou. So much. It makes me so happy that you (and everyone else) loves it. <3 :-D

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